November 12
13 comments
November 12
13 comments
By David
November 12, 2023
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Hi David, I know about AI and what you created sounds brilliant, I am going to check it out.
I’ll check it out. Thanks, David.
I have been using it to improve my synopsis. It’s wonderful and look forward to learning more about how to maximize it
I think this tool is a game changer. I’m going to continue to play around with it. Thanks so much, David!! It’s worth the upgrade.
Thanks for taking the time to try it out and posting a sample of the feedback you received. Happy to talk more about how to get the most out of this tool.
Sure, David. When is a good time?
I’ll post a date after the holidays and invite everybody to show up.
Perfect!
I just pasted some of my dialogue into the OBS ChatGP assistance. Wow! This is what I got back:
Thank you for sharing this excerpt from your screenplay. Here’s some feedback focusing on different aspects of the dialogue:
Character Voice and Authenticity: The dialogue effectively captures distinct voices for both Erica and John. Erica’s lines, with Spanish words like “La polla” and “perfecto,” along with references to her “pappi,” add a cultural layer to her character, making her dialogue feel authentic and personal. John’s responses and the way he teases Erica with lines like “It takes a shark to know one,” effectively highlight his character’s playful yet sharp nature.
Dialogue Flow and Pace: The dialogue flows naturally and has a conversational rhythm, which is good. The exchange of quick, short lines, especially in the latter part of the excerpt, creates a dynamic and engaging interaction. The use of actions like snapping fingers and John throwing Erica into a salsa dance adds a lively, visual element to the conversation, enhancing the scene’s energy.
Subtext and Character Dynamics: There’s a clear subtext of flirtation and deeper connection between the characters. The mention of family (“la familia es familia”) and career choices (“Capital Hill is your mistress”) suggests a history and depth to their relationship. Erica’s almost whispering line and the physical contact (pat on the ass) indicate a level of intimacy and comfort between them.
Advancing the Story and Character Development: The dialogue touches on several aspects of their lives – relationships, family dynamics, career choices – hinting at their backgrounds and current life situations. This not only develops the characters but also leaves room for further exploration of these themes in the story.
Suggestions for Improvement:
Consider the context in which John uses the word “dick.” If this is intended to be a light, playful scene, the term fits well. However, if the scene is aiming for a more serious or romantic tone, a less crude term might be more suitable.
Erica’s line about edging John up and making him look like a new man is intriguing. Perhaps you can expand on this a bit more to add depth to her character or their relationship.
The mention of “Capital Hill” and “K-Street” is a nice touch, adding a layer to John’s character. Ensure that subsequent dialogue or scenes build upon these hints to flesh out his professional background.
Overall, the dialogue is engaging, revealing key aspects of the characters while maintaining a lively and natural exchange. The blend of personal and playful elements in their conversation creates a compelling dynamic, inviting the audience to learn more about their relationship and individual stories.
I think I’ll upgrade!
Wow, Mr.B. Rivers of gratitude are flooding the banks of our village. That seems like a lot of work you did for us … and it’s appreciated – and mind-blowing. Tried it? Naw, not yet. Had to go for a walk and take a nap after reading this. If it is half of what you described … damn, Sam … we are in for a fun and productive ride. Demo? Yes please. I appreciate you looking out for us. I hope you and everyone has a great end of the year and is ready to tear the roof off in 2024.
This sounds exciting. I would like to see a demo. Enjoy the holiday everyone!
Thanks, David. Will check it out!